ALTERATIONS - 28 FEBRUARY 2009 SEND[Naionna] Greetings! Do you have the time to handle your 15 minutes of alteration prize? Please use REPORT to respond, thanks. Bremerial reports back yes Message sent to all online game staff. You may type ONDUTY to see which staff members are currently on duty. If you feel the need to speak with the staff, please type ASSIST for a list of options. *** GameMaster Naionna is here to answer your referral. *** Naionna waves to you. [Pouncing Puma Table] The chairs next to the table are draped with golden puma hide. The soft hide is tastefully embossed with small circular shapes in various sizes. The edges of the table are beautifully carved into the shape of hemlock leaves. Also here: GameMaster Naionna Obvious exits: out Naionna says, "Hi there." You wave to Naionna. Naionna asks, "Have all your items with you and such?" Naionna grins. You softly say, "Indeed." You work your way out of some black plate armor. Naionna says, "Awesome." Naionna says, "Lets get started! 15 minutes starting now." Naionna winks. You offer your plate armor to Naionna, who has 30 seconds to accept the offer. Click CANCEL to prematurely cancel the offer. Naionna has accepted your offer and is now holding some black plate armor. Naionna turns an inquisitive ear towards you. You whisper to Naionna: Some time-worn black armor: This archaic expertly forged armor is made from a thick black alloy. It has been fashoned from slightly overlapping alloy strips, hammered and secured in place by molton strips of iron.Every piece of this alloy is perfectly matched and obviously well cared for, presenting a uniform look of elegance and simplicity. The lines of the armor are clean and subtle, with little adornment save the inlay of shadowy, blackened ora striations and dwarven denotations covering it, barely visible against the matte ebony background. However the care given cannot disguise several indentations upon the surface that are testament to past military campaigns. In addition, the outward appearance belies the uncomfortable nature of the armor that has obviously been constructed for someone of smaller stature than the wearer. Naionna whispers, "Okay stopping your time for now. A show on an item can only be 512 characters including the double spaces between the lines.Yours is 814 characters including spaces, so it needs to be cut down quite a bit to fit." Naionna says, "ALTER tells you quite a bit about those things too." Naionna says, "For future reference." You softly say, "If I knock off the line from In addition ..." Naionna says, "Still 546." Naionna says, "I could suggest changing all the 'this' into 'the." Naionna says, "Every piece of the alloy rather than every piece of this alloy." You nod. Naionna says, "It takes off 1 character at least for each one." You softly say, "Excellent." You softly ask, "Reduced sufficiently?" You softly say, "Can remove the word However too." Naionna says, "Alright how about this." Naionna says, "The archaic, expertly forged armor is made from thick black alloy and fashioned from slightly overlapping strips, then hammered and secured in place by molten strips of iron. Every piece is perfectly matched and well cared for, presenting a uniform look of elegance and simplicity. The lines of the armor are clean and subtle , with little adornment save the inlay of shadowy, blackened ora striations and the dwarven denotations covering it, barely visible against the matte ebony background. Unable to be disguised are several indentations upon the surface that are testament to past military campaigns." Naionna grins. Naionna says, "Its 510 characters with double spaces." You softly say, "Perfecto-mundo." You softly say, "Thanks." Naionna says, "Okay starting your fifteen minuts now then, so that you have the right guidelines to follow." s>nod You nod. Naionna says, "Eep, that was without spaces, so I'm going to have to cut it down some more." Naionna says, "Quick moment while I do that." Naionna says, "The archaic, expertly forged armor is made from thick black alloy and fashioned from slightly overlapping strips, hammered and secured in place by molten iron. Perfectly matched and well cared for, the lines of the armor are clean and subtle to present a uniform look of elegance and simplicity. Barely visible against the matte ebony metal is the inlay of shadowy, blackened ora striations and the dwarven denotations covering it. Testaments to past military campaigns, a few indentations mar the surface." You softly say, "Nicely paraphrased - and still retains the feel." Naionna beams! Naionna says, "Awesome, glad you like it." Naionna offers you some time-worn black armor. Click ACCEPT to accept the offer or DECLINE to decline it. The offer will expire in 30 seconds. Naionna says, "Its registered." Naionna asks, "Next?" You accept Naionna's offer and are now holding some time-worn black armor. You offer your leather-trimmed goggles to Naionna, who has 30 seconds to accept the offer. Click CANCEL to prematurely cancel the offer. Naionna has accepted your offer and is now holding some leather-trimmed goggles. You quietly whisper to Naionna, "An archaic set of protective goggles with intricate leather straps and black alloy fastenings." Naionna says, "Long descriptions must remain 12-13 words or less so we need to cut this down a bit." Naionna says, "I suggest leaving off archaic and protective." Naionna says, "As goggles are protective by nature." Naionna says, "And archaic is slightly subjective." Naionna asks, "Thoughts?" You softly say, "Aye ... thinking of another adjective." You softly say, "Worn." Naionna asks, "As in time-worn?" You softly say, "Even better." Naionna grins. Naionna says, "You have that in your armor already." Naionna winks. You softly say, "Consistent then." Naionna offers you a set of time-worn goggles with leather straps and black alloy fastenings. Click ACCEPT to accept the offer or DECLINE to decline it. The offer will expire in 30 seconds. Naionna asks, "Next?" You accept Naionna's offer and are now holding a set of time-worn goggles with leather straps and black alloy fastenings. Naionna says, "And they are registered." You take off a front-laced sage green bodice. You offer your sage green bodice to Naionna, who has 30 seconds to accept the offer. Click CANCEL to prematurely cancel the offer. Naionna has accepted your offer and is now holding a front-laced sage green bodice. Naionna says, "Your color." Naionna winks. You quietly whisper to Naionna, "A front-laced sage green bodice: Finely woven linen dyed a flawless sage green forms a sleevless garment of simple lines and few adornments. A single continuous strand of finely braided white cotton is threaded through opposing silver eyelets in a spiral fashion, drawing the bodice loosly together. Four pieces of whalebone within the bodice's surface help to give it a fasionable shape, allowing it to accentuate the most buxom of figures. Within the front of the boddice you see a cleverly concealed series of straps forming a pocket designed to discretely hold a small weapon in place." You softly say, "Counting as we speak..." Naionna says, "Too long with double spaces and the corrections to words that were misspelled." Naionna says, "But I'm tweaking it to fit." You softly say, "Sounds good." Naionna says, "Finely woven linen dyed a flawless sage green forms a sleeveless garment of simple lines and few adornments. A single, continuous strand of braided white cotton is threaded through opposing silver eyelets in a spiral fashion, drawing them loosely together. Four pieces of whalebone within the sides create a fashionable shape, accentuating the most buxom of figures. Within the bustline is a cleverly concealed series of straps designed to discretely hold a small weapon." You softly say, "Thanks." Naionna nods. Naionna says, "One more." Naionna offers you a front-laced sage green bodice. Click ACCEPT to accept the offer or DECLINE to decline it. The offer will expire in 30 seconds. You let out a cheer! Naionna says, "That's registered." You accept Naionna's offer and are now holding a front-laced sage green bodice. You put on a front-laced sage green bodice. You pull some brocaded dark chestnut leggings off your legs. You offer your dark chestnut leggings to Naionna, who has 30 seconds to accept the offer. Naionna has accepted your offer and is now holding some brocaded dark chestnut leggings. Naionna turns an inquisitive ear towards you. You quietly whisper to Naionna, "Some tight fitting chestnut leggings: These well-worn leggings have been weathered by years of exposure to the elements. the leather of these trousers is starting to wear thin. A faint line of elven runes can be seen trailing down the left leg, overlapping the faded outline of a sunburst. An intricate pattern of twisting vines of ivy winds its way down the right leg, snaking over the outline of another barely visible sunburst. Though ravaged by time, these leggings appear sturdy enough to last a good while longer." You softly say, "Whoa - can ye change elven runes for Dwarven runes please." You softly say, "My mother would never forgive me." You blush a glowing shade of red. Naionna says, "Lets leave out fitting because its too long." You nod to Naionna. Naionna says, "Or rather leave out tight, and just make it fitted." Naionna says, "It conveys the same thing and its better to use that when they are off of a body." Naionna says, "Tight is odd when its not worn." Naionna grins. You softly say, "Sounds good - heh." Naionna offers you some fitted chestnut leggings. Click ACCEPT to accept the offer or DECLINE to decline it. The offer will expire in 30 seconds. You accept Naionna's offer and are now holding some fitted chestnut leggings. Naionna says, "Alright, that does it! These are registered too." You beam happily at Naionna! Naionna exclaims, "Enjoy!" Naionna waves. You pull some fitted chestnut leggings over your legs. Naionna asks, "Was there anything else I could help with tonight?" You softly say, "No that was perfect." Naionna nods. Naionna exclaims, "Have a good night!" Naionna gestures and a shaft of scintillating light from somewhere above pierces the ceiling and engulfs her. When the light recedes Naionna is no longer there.